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Have you ever had a conversation
without any words?
Have you ever gone flying
and left your body behind?
Have you ever been so enthralled
that time lost its meaning?
Have you ever locked your heart and soul
and forgotten to shut the door?
Have you ever been afraid of losing
something you may not even have?
©2002-2009 ~shadowylight
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Awww Aww That is so so beautiful. I love it. +fav !

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cassiejo123, fallingintograce, onewingedangel, trashcanpunk (although he has left DA), and disturbedathena. If you feel you deserve a place on this list, prove it to me.

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:icononewingedangel:
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OMFG!

That has so much power for me right now.

+favlove

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"If you said that you could kill the things inside me, you're just a liar... everything inside me is already dead..."
:iconjoe-schmoe:
wow... great poem, and i love the rhyme scheme, but most of all i love the message it sends, great work.

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"at 4 in the morning you know where i'll be... im running red lights asleep at the wheel"
:iconblackhalo:
great poem/song. it simple, and actually lacks poeti nature...but still has a simplistic power. the last line is very akward though, breaking uot of the flow and all. u need to fix that.
:iconjesusbite:
What teh fuck was up with the rhyme in the second stanza? Booooooo.
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Aweosme, simple but good. It's got a nice message, good stuff :) (Smile)

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~Mexicano de alma aunque mi mente piense en inglés.
:iconjimdownside:
"Have you ever locked your heart and soul
and forgotten to shut the door?"

heh, well.. this one time. anyway, i like the first stanza alot, it feels like an intro almost and leads in well. second part is cool, but i dislike rhymeing so kinda lost some points there. all around not bad.

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:icongroovus:
This one don't get to me though I've tried all the forementioned & I still find it hard to take any advice, like you I rather give it
As for the poem I agree with most that the second verse needs some work, what is up to you just do as you do & like it cause that's where all good works begin

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I'm jus' here & now

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